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My Amazing Holiday
On sunday me and my family went to QE2 it was so fun . The first thing we did was we jumped into the pool and it was so nice and warm, but when i went in the other deep pool it was freezing cold, so then I quickly jumped back into the nice and warm pool. Later on we went to the other pool and there was a line where it said no little kids allowed, so my cousins were not allowed in the deep pool. Only I was allowed and then my step dad said, “let's have a race to the end and back and if i win, we’ll eat food from home and if you win we’ll get KFC” and then I said, “deal“! so we raced to the end and back and i won! I shouted, “yay”. Afterwards we went to kfc and I was eating so fast because i was so hungry. Later on I wanted to spend time with my family so we decided to go to the movies to watch The Meg and we also got two large popcorns and two drinks for me and my family.
On the other days, I just relaxed at home, went to church and had white Sunday. The school holidays was awesome, fantastic and incredible.
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